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Tuesday, November 9, 2010

Nov PAD Day 9: Can't-Stop-Tanka


The prompt for the Nov PAD Challenge Day 9 is either a slow-down or a never-slow-down poem. I chose the latter...and the poetic form of the tanka.

Can't-Stop-Tanka
Expectations drive,
pushing myself to edges,
seeking perfection
on precipice teetering--
there's no way I can slow down.

Copyright 2010 by Susanne Barrett

Not slowing down,
at

4 comments:

  1. sarahNovember 9, 2010 at 8:09 PM

    Cleverly done - it makes me feel anxious, like I want to reach out and grab you before you go over!

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  2. Brian MillerNovember 10, 2010 at 8:55 AM

    i am one that is always having to slow myself down...

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  3. Susanne BarrettNovember 10, 2010 at 12:42 PM

    My husband, bless his heart, is always trying to get me to slow down. :)

    He said that the first line should be SELF-expectations...but then I had more than five syllables. Couldn't do it. ;)

    Yes, slowing down is hard for me. Sometimes I fear that if I slow down, my world will implode. But I also know I need to slow down or I'll miss too much of life....

    Thanks for your thoughts, Sarah and Brian.

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  4. ClaudiaNovember 11, 2010 at 12:29 PM

    sounds slightly familiar to me...
    thanks for the reminder...

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