Tuesday, November 17, 2009

Carry On Tuesday Prompt # 27



Carry On Tuesday Prompt #27: "Some love lasts a lifetime. True love lasts forever." -- Author unknown.


This week's prompt from Carry On Tuesday was not an easy one to tackle. With so many of my friends having difficulties in their marriages, separating, divorcing, the sadness I feel for them often translates to my poems. So I apologize beforehand for the tone of this poem, but it's just what I feel when I place myself in their lives, knowing that they've struggled, hiding the scars.

This is my fifth version of this poem. I love the first stanza, but getting the rest of the poem to flow from it has not been easy, and I am still not completely pleased with this version. I'll take it to my Writers' Workshop meeting next month to see if they can give me some ideas. And please feel free to offer some of your own....


Forever
"True love lasts forever,"
she said,
trailing fingertips
through their years.

Theirs had been the same
tale often told:
love entwining,
twisting in time
into binding cords,
cutting into delicate self
if she struggled,
leaving unseen scars.

Unless, of course,
one gently gauged
the depths of her eyes....

But no one did.



Copyright 2009 Susanne Barrett

4 comments:

Nara said...

I think it's beautiful. Nice job :)

sarah said...

I love it. Especially "trailing fingertips through their years." It's a beautiful and haunting poem.

lifendream said...

Well, this has a mysterious depth and yet says about the binding cord and the unseen scars too!

Good one.

Cassiopeia Rises said...

You have found out the truth of love and marriage.Your poem is beautiful



love,Melanie.

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