Carry On Tuesday Prompt #31

I haven't written much poetry since NaNoWriMo took over my (very limited) writing time, but this week I decided to return to the prompts at Carry on Tuesday. This prompt (#31) was one that spoke to me more than the last few, so I thought I'd see what words and images spun out of the prompt.

The prompt is the opening line of "Touch" by Octavio Paz:
"My hands open the curtains of your being."

So here is my contribution -- a hurried one, only in second draft form:

Her hands
opening the curtains
of his being.
Trying to peer into
his darkness,
she can see nothing --
understand nothing.

She persists,
her eyes plundering
the black velvet depths.
Not one shimmer
brings her a hint
of revelation,
of relief.

Sighing,
she draws the
curtains closed,
bringing together
the edges
perfectly --
so that he will
never
know.

Copyright 2009 by Susanne Barrett

Let me know what you think, okay? I welcome ideas for improving this rough version. I'll probably take it to our Writers' Workshop next month, too, for feedback and ideas.